Fadlan's character description

Hi fellow bloggers. Last week we had to do a character description and we had to make our own character, so how we did it is to go on a website called build your wild self some people did half human half animal and some people did all human but i did half human half animal. Then we had to do a Y chart and wrote about what is our characters actions, what our character looks like and what is our characters personality traits. After that we had to do three paragraphs using our ideas in the Y chart and make sentences using the ideas. I have included this below to look at.                                     Here is my plan.                             

Jack has 8 octopus tentacles to help him climb walls and it also makes him bullet proof. He has wings to help him fly to catch fish and Jack can breathe under water. He has crab arms to help him pinch criminals. Jack has horns to bash through walls.

   

When jack sees a burger he immediately runs to it and eats it. Jack lives in a cave and he works for the police and that’s why he catches criminals. If he gets bored in the cave he flies to the city and eats donuts.

       

Jack is honest to everyone and jack is angry when the criminals runaway. Jack is kind to people and people are kind to him because when criminals steal from people Jack puts the criminals in jail and Jack gives the stolen stuff back to the owner, the owner of the stuff says thank you to Jack. Jack is sad when a criminal captures someone.

I would like some good feedback about my work.